BEC中级写作parttwo,不对不好的句子请帮忙挑出来.还有如果这样写能及格吗youworkforPJTLTD.,amanufacturingcompany,youneedmorestaffinyoudepartmentandyoulinemanangerhasaskedyoutowriteareportexplainingw-掌乐问答网

BEC中级写作parttwo,不对不好的句子请帮忙挑出来.还有如果这样写能及格吗youworkforPJTLTD.,amanufacturingcompany,youneedmorestaffinyoudepartmentandyoulinemanangerhasaskedyoutowriteareportexplainingw

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BEC中级写作parttwo,不对不好的句子请帮忙挑出来.还有如果这样写能及格吗

youworkforPJTLTD.,amanufacturingcompany,youneedmorestaffinyoudepartmentandyoulinemanangerhasaskedyoutowriteareportexplainingwhy.

reporton:numberofstaff

date:2011.2.3

Thepurposeofthereportisaimingonrecruitingmorestaffmembers

asyouknowwehad50staffsin2001andwearenowhaving53staffsbutourordershasrisentwicefrom200to400.Wereceivedalotofcomplaintrecentlyaboutdelayeddelievery.thesuatiationbecomeevenworsewhencompanydecidedtoincreasedtheannualholidayto5weeks,andabigorderwillcometoourdepardmentasthesalesdepartmentannouncedthattheygotfromainternationalcompany.Ithinkwehavenopeopletodogetthisworkdone,soinmyopinionit'stimetorecruitsomepeople.

Bestregards

Derek

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　　Thepurposeofthereportis(aimingon这个短语的用法是aimto,用在这路略显多余)recruitingmorestaffmembers 　　asyouknowwehad50staffsin2001andwearenowhaving53staffsbutourordershasrisentwice(直接用doubled)from200to400.Wereceivedalotofcomplaint(是不是改用复数?)recentlyaboutdelayeddelievery（单词拼写错误,再者英语的一半用法是delayofdelivery,更通顺一些）.thesuatiationbecome（第三人称单数?过去式?用原型是肯定不对的）evenworsewhencompanydecidedtoincreasedtheannualholidayto5weeks,andabigorderwillcometoourdepardmentasthesalesdepartmentannounced（thattheygotfrom去掉）a（用an）internationalcompany.Ithink（report里尽量别用ithink）wehaveno(enough好一点)peopletodoget（语法错误,双谓语）thisworkdone,soinmyopinionit'stimetorecruitsomepeople. 　　Bestregards（sincerelyyours）　　Derek 　　总结：不太会及格.文章有不少低级错误,估计阅卷人看过后印象会不好的,因为阅卷人都是很严谨的英国人,希望你再接再励.